Aitis [{The Cleansed Prostitute}]

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moltres27

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12-11-2012

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Aitis [{A Prostitutes Exoneration}]

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It was the best of times, and it was the worst of times. Little did Aitis's mother know that her daughter would be seeing her father leave for the last time. Born into a time of despair and poverty, the greatest struggle for her mother had been keeping her alive. Sadly her mother, regarded as the most beautiful women ever born, was forced to choose the dark path to keep her daughter alive. For years she suffered this choice, each day spent silently awaiting the return of her beloved husband-the one man that could release her from this misery. But that day never came for her mother; rather, she remained in that nightmare for the rest of her days.

Aitis dreaded thoughts of her past, but as she grew up she was soon forced to live the very life that her mother had led to provide for her. With every man in Noxus knowing her mother's history, every day became a reminder of a father that abandoned them with nothing-not even a house. With the resemblence of her mother, she quickly became an object of lust to every man, while every man became an object of hatred in her eyes. Within time she too resorted to the miserable life of selling her body each night to any man willing to pay. And each night left her with less money than bad memories. She was a women, born below the heels of men oppressed and sad, she had nowhere else to go. She had to survive and that meant enduring the misery and torture just as her mother had. From the moment she first began her ascendence to adulthood, the eyes of every Noxian man became drawn to her. Each night men came upon her chambers to discover the very image of perfection and beauty lying scantily clothed upon her bed awaiting lustful punishment. Her infamy quickly spread across the land, and soon Aitis became the very symbol for lust and immoral love. Hearing about the tales of this infamous mistress, a man so hungry with lust came to visit Aitis with nothing but wicked intentions. Weak and out of options, she had to let him enter her place the same day each week. What he did to her was so cruel and inhuman, but her lack of strength prevented her from raising her voice or stopping him. Each time he would leave her unclothed and bruised, throwing the money on the floor as he left. Every week the same roaring footsteps signaled his approach before he would kick the door open to find Aitis as motionless as a dead picture. It was always the same-without feeling-just an object of adoration. Aitis would wrap herself in her arms while crying bitterly; all the clothes she had would be torn by him, he would use the Gods blessing only bequeathed to women as if they were instruments of violence or music.


Aitis would scream inside as the violent rhythmic movements would shake her to the very core. Her soul would be left vibrating twitching in agony of the memory. Tears ran down the stretch of her body, silently marking each moment spent suffering. The man would tear all her clothes before leaving her to shivering, cold, and alone on a tear soaked mattress. Oh how much she hated him, each week dreading his return, and each day praying for salvation to come through that door.

And so it was that one day when the door opened some other figure stood there , his face behind the shadows as he stood defending the light as it pierced through the door and filled it. Aitis instantly felt something-something different. The man whoever he was, took off his coat and placed around Aitis's shoulders as she trembled with fear. He told her not to fear, that he was different from other men. He told Aitis that he wasn’t there for her body, but rather he was there for her wounds-her emotional wounds. He told her that he knew her father and that her father wanted this man to deliver a message to Aitis if anything were to ever happen to him. He told the stranger of how he loved Aitis greatly, and how he used to sing about Aitis, and lastly he told her of how her father died. He explained to Aitis that her father was like an elder brother to him-telling him all about Aitis and her mother. Her mother was a Valkyrien, and the same blood flowed through her making her a Valkyrien as well. It wasn't long after her parents met that they fell in love. But when a Valkyrien marries her true love she has to seal her powers in an object locked forever. So her father safely carried the locket which held the powers of her mother, for if a Valkyrien wore it the powers would be unleashed. Without it Valkyriens were powerless, much like how Aitis was powerless to stop those who abused her.

Now only one Valkyrien remained and that was Aitis. The man opened his palm revealing the locket her mother once wore, entrusted to him by her father to be delivered upon his death. Aitis couldn’t believe what had happened after he left, She still felt it, the feeling she felt when the man had just stepped in the room. After that man had left, she wasn’t sure if she should wear the locket or not as she stood before the mirror while torn piles of clothes gathered at her feet-her body uncovered as she gazed at the reflection of the shiny locket. She took the locket and finally placed it around her neck, and in that instant power flowed through her body covering her in rays of light. Every curve of her body slowly became covered by what appeared to be clothlike material, but was seemingly made of light. It filled her with great power, and she knew that she no longer had to fear any man.


A moment later the door flew open and there stood her weekly visitor-the man who had tortured her for months. He slammed the door behind him, furious too see Aitis not prepared for him he leapt towards her. But Aitis was waiting, and she just smiled knowing that the locket would protect her. Every time the men had come before the neighbors would hear the muffled screams of Aitis. Today they heard shrieks of agony and suffering. The only thing different was today they weren't Aitis’s….

After her vengeance was struck she finally walked out into the streets, the gentle man's coat and the locket covering her. She walked alone, looking in the dark alleyways searching for the faces of men who had used her and abused her, and when she found them she punished them. She was a beacon of hope for the poor and the lost. The light from her locket which now had turned into armor was like a beacon of hope for the suffering. Any man who ever had wrong intentions soon saw their death walking across the street. Aitis hid her vengeance behind her locket, and she searched for her savior-the man who delivered her salvation in the palm of his hand and the only man she ever saw…


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Passive: Her abilities gain bonus effect or act differently based upon her state. When she is standing still, her Elegance bar fills up, when she is moving her Vengeance bars fills up. One bar always remains empty. If she moves her Elegance bars start to deplete and her Vengeance will increase, Vice-versa. Casting her basic skills doesn’t consume her state.
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Q skill: a slow skill shot that travels in opposite direction, from maximum range of the skill to the direction from which point Aitis casted her ability, dealing damage to all units along its path.
Elegance bonus: the skills shots taunts enemy towards its direction, for a short duration.
Vengeance Bonus: The damage and the missile speed and range are greatly increased.

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W skill: she spins channels for a second (castable while moving). It remains there until Aitis reactivates the ability, only 1 trap can remain active. She can reactivate this ability to deal damage to all units standing on it, It deals More damage if both Aitis and her enemy stand on it, and knocks them in.(very small knock back)
Elegance bonus: it increases movement speed of allies on it, and it provides vision around it.
Vengeance bonus: The damage is greatly increased (Greatly)
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E skill: Aitis sends out light from the orb that deals Damage over time, However she can cast the skill again to cancel the Damage on enemy and heal herself instead
Elegance bonus: She heals herself more if he chooses to
Vengeance bonus: it slows enemy, and deals more damage
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Ultimate: it’s a skill that is partly controlled by her movements, when any of her state bars reaches full she can activate the ability (Toggle), to consume the state, but the state also regenerates at same speed.
She can active Pure Elegance toggle or Pure Vengeance toggle,
Pure elegance state: She gains 4 gold per 10 second, heals all herself and her allies, healing allies more than herself every few seconds, and more health regeneration to all her allies all over the map who are out of her healing radius. If she doesn't move much she won’t leave this state
Pure vengeance: Her basic attacks get empowered Dealing Ability damage . Gains bonus ability power and movement speed. Her attacks Also deal damage based on maximum health , this doesn't work on same champion for next 10 seconds. While active toggle, if she stops for very small duration, the Vengeance bar will fall.


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Moby the White

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12-11-2012

hmm ive seen this before....where...OH YA!

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It was the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was the age of wisdom, it was the age of foolishness, it was the epoch of belief, it was the epoch of incredulity, it was the season of Light, it was the season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it was the winter of despair, we had everything before us, we had nothing before us, we were all going direct to Heaven, we were all going direct the other way - in short, the period was so far like the present period, that some of its noisiest authorities insisted on its being received, for good or for evil, in the superlative degree of comparison only.
made me laugh..


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moltres27

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Originally Posted by Moby the White View Post
hmm ive seen this before....where...OH YA!



made me laugh..
Finally Finally Someone who Just doesn't only plays games but also Reads Book, Charles Dickens FTW

Hey btw Moby you like the language of this lore more than my previous one?


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Moby the White

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12-11-2012

eh...it needs work. You refer to the champion using his and her. This confuses the reader. also check your spacing on some words I think I caught a few that were spelled right but had a space thrown in there. I think I am going to add a section to my lore tips about common errors in english.


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driredeath

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12-12-2012

call me ishmale


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moltres27

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call me ishmale
Wuts that?


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QuantumTorque

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12-12-2012

OMG This LORE IS ABSOLUTELY FANTASTIC, no other Lol champ as such good lore, even in champions concepts i didnt come across such a beautifully written masterpiece.

Dude i wonder what her skills would be, because in end she sounds so OP. That perverted guy must have lost his Dick lol. I bet you must be a writer in real life
. And by any chance did you make the art yourself? because im guessing the guy who saved him must be jayce, because the coat she is wearing has a tail like Jayce, tell me its Jayce!!


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moltres27

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12-12-2012

I wish i was a professional writer but im not, i thought that i wrote it very badly, you are the first guy who says it is not thanks for first positive feeback

and lol he is not Jayce, and i did make that myself =)


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Moby the White

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12-12-2012

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Originally Posted by QuantumTorque View Post
OMG This LORE IS ABSOLUTELY FANTASTIC, no other Lol champ as such good lore, even in champions concepts i didnt come across such a beautifully written masterpiece.

Dude i wonder what her skills would be, because in end she sounds so OP. That perverted guy must have lost his Dick lol. I bet you must be a writer in real life
. And by any chance did you make the art yourself? because im guessing the guy who saved him must be jayce, because the coat she is wearing has a tail like Jayce, tell me its Jayce!!

no offence but i feel this guy is trolling... yes the piece has potential at being really good; however, the errors in it make it urksome to read. I am actually willing to edit this if you want moltres I feel I could keep it as it is but make it more readable.


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SilverFlesh

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12-12-2012

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.... he would use the Gods blessing only bequeathed to women....

....womanly opening.....

......covering what was not meant to be seen by others....
Wow i really love some of the synonyms you invented for female assets, LOL the second was very funny. But ultimately reading your lore was very much Fun, and i can tell you no one can disagree. +1 for your imagination, some of the scenes you created are very picturesque, like when the good guy enters her bedroom an all the light thing.

When I first read the title I thought some pervert was creating his own porn lol, but inside it was different , it wasn't the least bit derogatory to women actually it was absolutely it's opposite. i really like the fact that she even fell in love in the end. I read 50 shades of grey after some of my girlfriends recommended it. She wrote something like you, but yours has less of the explicit description and is even quite more...arousing lol. You should try writing a book in the same way u wrote the lore for Atis. I will bookmark this thread and see when you have come up with some interesting skills, but don’t make them explicit, coz u have to consider the ESRB ratings. Congratulations


PS: The art is very mature, i will suggest you to remove it, Don’t get me wrong its very nicely drawn, way better than what i could have drawn, but it’s just a suggestion