Dragon Rising [A Master Yi Story] -rewrite-

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ZeUberman

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06-15-2012

You said there would be a real rapey vibe in the end of chapter 9, but . . . holy ****. Good job! I'm going to go throw up now.


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mememan

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06-15-2012

I was wondering why singed trowed away his chance of humilating yi by hiring assassins to kill him, until i read that shen was there...

Really good job it's in my top3 fan fics from LoL


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Compla

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06-16-2012

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Originally Posted by ZeUberman View Post
You said there would be a real rapey vibe in the end of chapter 9, but . . . holy ****. Good job! I'm going to go throw up now.
I warned you.... heh. At first I felt I went overboard... but then I realized I was being retarded, and that that was the whole point.

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Really good job it's in my top3 fan fics from LoL
Ha, thanky you. You mind telling me what the other 3 are? I'm always interesting in reading the works of others.



On a side note, the next chapter is taking a while, because I'm not sure whether to write every moment of the battle, or give you the highlights in a more condensed version.... thoughts?


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Astraltar

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06-16-2012

So I read the 2 episodes on page 2, and then eagerly turned to page 3 for the epic battle...
WHAT NO
WHERE IS IT
MOOAAAAR


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mememan

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06-16-2012

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Ha, thanky you. You mind telling me what the other 3 are? I'm always interesting in reading the works of others.
actualy, the other 2 are from completely diferent genres...
so my top 3... actualy top 1, i couldn't compare the 3 works because they are from diferent genres, is like that:

Loco Buri; from Lolrus Avenger, publicated at tormented soil blog and FanFiction.Net, it's the love story between garen and katarina before the league ever existed, starting few days before they first met in battle

Annie and friends; from RyuuMasken, it's Annie's days on the league (except for the last charpter, that talks about how she decided to join the league), it's similar to you job here, but since Annie is an innocent kid, it's not about an epic journey searching for revenge, just her dayly live... really interesting.

and, obviously, your story, Dragon Rise.

as I said, you 3 are in the same position, since i can't compare different kinds of storyies... it's like comparing Romeu & Julieta with Lord of the rings, both are excelent, but impossible to compare.


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MiaoLong

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06-18-2012

Chapter 11


The five champions teleported into their fountain. Yi looked up, and saw the familiar sight, of a brilliant blue nexus, continually summoning blue minions to do autonomous battle all over the arena. Proud towers kept watch over their domain, just as the sun was rising over the battlefield. Yi stopped by the merchant, and picked up a lifestealing specter from the tiny man.

“Shen. Ahri. Come with me to the Ancient Golem. I need your help.”
The three strode off into the jungle, for a short while, until they reached an enclave. Within it, a great stone construct slumbered. It was the Ancient Golem. Powerful, durable, and based off of ancient guardians that were rumored to forever guard the gates to Icathia, it was one of two of its kind upon the Summoner’s Rift. The powerful golem stood with blue runic stones of power circling about it, as it slumbered on in peace. Two lizards tended to the cracks in its stony flesh, every once in a while, munching upon the rock lice they found lodged in the folds of the Golem with delight.

“Ahri. Please bait it.”
“Oh, anything for you.” She ribbed sarcastically. Ahri gathered magical energy in her orb, and then launched the spirit ball at the golem, cracking its stomach, and causing it to rise in anger. The stone beast lumbered after Ahri, roaring all the way, while the lizards attacked shooting fireballs, employing their weak grasp of magic.

“Shen! Let’s go!”
Yi ran behind the Golem, and cut deeply into its leg, causing the rocky beast to stumble, and miss a crushing blow aimed at Ahri. The Golem’s punch instead crushed a boulder off to the left. Dodging a vicious backhand by the Golem, Shen tossed a vorpal blade into its other leg, causing the giant to trip.

“Yi! Ahri and I are going! Good luck!”
Yi nodded, and then resumed hacking at the fallen golem. The beast rose to a knee, and slammed a fist right where Ahri stood a moment a second prior, before rounding on Yi with silent rage. Although beast it was, it was still powerful. Yi time and time again, barely managed to dodge its crushing blows. After a swing of the golem’s fists that grazed Yi’s shoulder, the giant reared up, and kicked Yi hard, sending the Wuju master tumbling. Yi rolled into he hit a tree; he slowly stood up, and mentally checked his injuries. His shoulder was bruised badly, and his hip might be broken. He needed to heal.

He flipped his sword to the side, and killed one of the lizards that were attacking him. As blood spurted from the lizard, the specter hungrily drank up the liquid, and it immediately healed Yi’s wounds with magic waves. Yi breathed deeply, and smiled.

The golem punched the ground hard, but Yi stepped to a side, and then rolled underneath it. He stabbed the golem once more in the leg, causing the giant to fall to a knee. Yi leaped high into the air, and flipped his sword downwards, igniting his Wuju style. With his Braveheart, Yi sank his Dragon Rising sword deep into right where a human’s nerve cluster would be, at the base of the neck. The lizards to the sides were killed instantly by the shooting runic branches, and the from the golem shot many spikes and hexes from Braveheart, yet although the golem sank to the ground, it still moved.

Tough b*stard, Yi cursed. He would have to use his summoner’s spell. Yi titled his head to the sky, and spoke to the heavens:
“Aki! Now!”

A disembodied voice rung through his head, as Aki responded: “Yes, Master Yi!” A golden, ethereal beam dropped from the sky, and formed itself into a clawed hand. The hand reached into the golem’s heart, and with a sickening crunch, it caved in that section of the golem’s chest.

The golem, with a fresh hole in its chest, fell slowly to the ground, and when it did, the earth let loose a tremor like a small earthquake.
And when Yi was done, the crests of the ancient golems floated about him in a ring. He felt the crest draw energy from the earth, improving the frequency at which he could launch his abilities, and Mana flooded his body with each breath he took. He enjoyed the temporary boost in power. And then he left.

He had not a second to lose. He had to move to the next monster’s camp.



Yi crouched in the jungle, moving silently through the brush.

Where were the b*stards? Yi wondered, annoyed.

The wolf pack he was hunting had disappeared into the brush. One leader, and two subordinates had escaped his initial Blades Dash into the heart of their pack. These wolves were dangerous in these close quarters, and very capable of finding the heart of his weakness, and exploiting it. Yi shouldered his Dragon Rising. They must be close.
To the side of his head, a wolf leaped from the bush, teeth bared, and eyes wild. Yi tilted to his head to the side, barely avoiding the rabid beast’s snapping jaws.

The wolf hit the ground on its haunches, snapping about frantically as it slid. Yi charged forwards with his sword raised, but he was forced back as a second wolf burst from the bushes to drive him back. Yi lowered his sword point, ready to run the two wolves through, when the leader burst from its hiding spot. The Giant Wolf was larger than Yi was; its eyes were frantic and red, its teeth were as long as daggers, just as sharp, and yellow, and it slobbered all over the ground as it snapped.

Yi waved his sword about, ready.

The Giant Wolf howled, before leaping forwards on all fours, apparently aiming to tackle Yi with its shoulders. Yi barely managed to blow the tackle with his blade; with dismay he noted that the legendary sword barely cut through the wolf’s thick fur.
Yi hacked at the enormous wolf’s neck with a double strike, and then he flipped into the center of all three wolves, whilst drawing his foot-swords. With both hands, he flung his swords in opposite directions, catching both of the smaller wolves in the air as they leaped. Before the wolves could even whine in pain, Yi stepped into Slipspace, and saw once more, only the red tassels of his foot-swords. He dashed to one, and then the other, dragging his sword in the real world as he dashed. When Yi stepped back into the real world, only four halves of the smaller wolves were left, and the leader. The Giant Wolf took a step forwards—and then a blood-curdling howl stopped it in his tracks.


One dog after another, Yi thought, as he saw a pale gold hand reach down from the sky, not Aki’s but an enemy summoner's, and crush the Giant Wolf’s heart. The wolf leader slumped forwards, dead. Behind the wolf’s corpse, was another, more dangerous wolf. Warwick, the Bloodhunter, stepped over his brethren’s body, grinning as best he could behind his wolf’s snout. The enemy champion wasted no time in attack. A single whirling strike with both claws from the werewolf left a deep gash in the Master’s chest, and Yi could see that the disgusting monster lapped up the blood that spilled on him, stitching the Bloodhunter’s wounds.

The monster looked up from his bloody meal, at Yi, and grinned.
“More,” Warwick said, “Spill more blood.”
Yi wiped the trickle of crimson from his lip.
“Yours.” Yi replied.

The werewolf howled, boosting his attack speed, and started tearing at Yi. He had to be impressed a bit by the Bloodhunter. The monster could fight; Yi could barely block the rapid attacks from the beast. Another Hungering Strike barely missed Yi, carving into an innocent tree behind them. The tree immediately shriveled as its’ fluids wrapped about Warwick’s arm, letting him lap them up from his forearms.

The werewolf growled in frustration, and circled about Yi. Yi simply kept the point of his sword aimed at his enemy.
And then he ignited his blade with the Wuju Prison, wrapping his sword with green runes and hexes once more. With one strike, Yi snared Warwick into place, trapping the werewolf on the ground he stood. The werewolf struggled against his bindings, until Yi tossed a foot-sword past Warwick, cutting him across the face, and causing him to yelp, and then impaling the werewolf’s foot, or paw, into the ground with the other foot-sword, which caused him to howl in pain.

With a single step, Yi stepped into Slipspace once more, rushing towards the footsword behind Warwick. Somewhere along the way, the Bloodhunter howled in pain from being cut across the chest. Yi dashed to the foot-sword lodged in Warwick’s paw, and then ripped it out. The werewolf collapsed to the ground, gravelly wounded, but still extremely dangerous. It was going to be a close fight.

And then, Yi sensed a presence behind him. The Wuju master smiled, and then took a few steps back to the brush, lowering his sword. The Bloodhunter growled in anger.
“Running?!”
Yi just smiled, and stepped into the brush, disappearing from sight.

The Bloodhunter howled in anger, and sniffed into the air. The beast could see just as well with his nose as with his eyes, and he saw Yi, bathed in fragrant blood, hiding in the brush.

With rage, the Bloodhunter launched his ultimate attack, leaping at Yi…

“Disgusting. Can’t fight anyone if they aren’t half-dead already, huh?” Ahri stepped out of the brush, with foxfires swirling about her.

The flames launched themselves at Warwick like heat-seeking missiles, catching Warwick first on the brow, then the back, and then the stomach, stumbling the beast with every strike along the way.

Yi stepped low, and then kicked upwards onto his sword, knocking Warwick into the air.
As the werewolf reached his apex, a spirit orb shot forwards, and punched a hole in the Bloodhunter’s chest. The werewolf then fell to the ground, dead. After a second, the champion burst apart in white flame and smoke.

“First blood has been spilled!” called out the magically empowered announcer, as the proclamation thundered through Summoner’s Rift.
“You owe me,” called Ahri, and with that she disappeared back into her lane.
Yi smiled, sighed, and then moved on to his next monster camp, despite his grievous wounds.


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mememan

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06-18-2012

Never tryied jungling with yi =p seens dificult... Very good job as aways, but i think there is a few mistakes in the beggining of the text and around the midle of it... I'm not an especialist in english, so i'm not sure... Wuju read it again and search for mistakes? XD


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MiaoLong

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06-18-2012

Chapter 12

Raah!

Green smoke swirled about Morgana’s hands as she launched volley after volley of her basic attacks at Ahri, as the two battled for supremacy in the central lane. The fox could barely avoid the stinging blows; she was too slow to avoid the vast majority of them, and the balls of magic burst with acrid pain with each contact.

I’ll have to take up my diet again… She mused, annoyed.

A particularly large smoke ball sped her way, so she grabbed an allied minion in hand’s reach, and crouched behind the confused, flailing pawn, and shielded herself with the hapless construct.

The cretin screeched in surprise as the ball of smoke struck it full in the face. Smoking, Ahri dropped the poor minion, leaving it moaning in pain on the ground. Ahri winced a bit at the pitiful sight, and stuck her tongue out as she said,

“Sorry…”
She didn’t have the time to see the minion raise a hand to say, It’s OK, because Morgana launched her binding spell at the fox. Ahri scooped the minion up once more with her foot, and tossed the minion in the path of the binding light. The minion was immediately forced to the ground by Morgana’s Dark Binding.
Ahri gave Morgana as sly smile as the fallen angel growled in frustration.

“Don’t know how to aim, Morgy?” said Ahri in a taunting manner, “Too bad you don’t have THIS!”

Ahri waved her hands to the side, and three fox fires burst from her body, and spun in a ring about her. She grinned, and ran straight at Morgana. Morgana desecrated the soil in front of Ahri, but the fox simply ran over it. Ahri’s fires launched themselves at Morgana then, and the fallen angel was forced to shield herself with a black magical bubble, absorbing most of the damage, but as the smoke cleared, and Morgana looked up, Ahri was still there.

“I’ll show you real skill!”
The fallen angel started to run back towards her tower, but Ahri was too quick, and she hit the angel square in the chest with a charm spell. Morgana turned to face Ahri, and stumbled slowly towards the fox, love-struck.

“True love, hurts,” Ahri said, as she gathered within her hands an orb of deception. “I’ve suffered broken bones and bruises and heartache for mine, but I grew stronger because of it.” Ahri went on, pumping more power into the orb. “Let me give you a taste of my angst.”
She launched the orb out with all the force of a cannonball. The spell knocked Morgana ten feet backwards, and as it spun back, it burned a deep hole in the angel’s withered wings. The angel stumbled back to the base of her tower, and laid there, wings drooping. With a start, the angel looked up, and growled.

“Ten thousand years I have warred with my sister!” Morgana spat, “The most high and mighty, the most merciless blood to ever share, my elder, Kayle the Perfect. You’d think she pissed wine and shat gold by the way she struts! You are arrogant to think you’re the only one to ever suffer. You want to know true suffering?” Morgana’s eyes narrowed, her mouth curled upwards in a grin, and she clenched her claws into fist. “Come closer. Let me show you the fruits of my suffering.”

Ahri hesitated for a half heartbeat, then stepped forwards, drawing the fire of the enemy tower. The first strike splashed on Ahri’s shoulder, burning at her neck. The fox winced at the blow.

“Ha! Die!” Morgana released snares all about her, trapping and slowing Ahri in its embrace. She had let loose her ultimate spell, Soul Shackles. The link grew stronger, and Morgana laughed, as she knew it would trap the fox under the murderous assault of her tower. She eagerly awaited the stun—
And Ahri stepped right through her. The first dash mortally wounded Morgana. The next two dashes dodged the next strikes of the tower, each splashing harmlessly into the dirt of the Summoner’s Rift. Ahri landed safely out of range of the tower, and turned around, not looking at Morgana once.

Morgana looked up, unbelieving, at Ahri; she had been expecting the fox to be stunned by her ultimate spell. But the wench fox… she…

Morgana slumped forwards, revealing a smoldering hole over where her heart was. White smoke and flame erupted from Morgana’s body to signify her death.

Ahri gazed callously at her victim’s lifeless body, and then returned to farming the center lane for more gold, and more power.






Ashe drew another arrow, and shot it spiraling towards her enemy. The arrow punched a half-foot into Cho’ Gath’s scaly flesh. The monster looked up at the new annoyance. Cho’Gath was only slightly larger than Ashe when the battle had started, but had grown to nearly three times that size over the fight. Cho’Gath was now the height of a three-story building, and nearly its width. The monster considered Ashe for a second, and then charged. Even slowed, the beast moved incredibly quickly! Ashe shot one, two more arrows into the monster before having to dodge to the side. Ashe rolled along the dirt for a second, before stopping near the brush. Strange… the terror of the Void seemed to stop there.

A rumbling sound came from beneath her, and before she could react, the tail of Cho’Gath erupted from underneath her, and pinned her to the wall. The disgusting appendage wrapped all about her body, and she could feel spikes entering in her as the tail compressed against the wall. She could see her bow, dropped on the ground, a foot out of reach. She desperately stretched her arm for it…

The monster lumbered forwards, savoring its next meal. With ravenous eyes, it opened its maw, and lunged forwards. Ashe closed her eyes—

“Hey big fella! Pick on someone your own size!”
Jax dashed forwards, between Cho’Gath and Ashe. As the monster clamped down, it caught instead, Jax’s outstretched arm. With a sickening crunch, the monster ripped the Grandmaster’s left arm clean off. Jax yelled in pain, yet managed to get one blow in. The stunning blow. Cho’Gath fell backwards, arm dangling from his mouth, stunned. His tail released Ashe immediately.

Ashe lunged for her bow, and drew an Enchanted Crystal Arrow. She drew a bead, steady... and let the bow tilt a hair to the left, and hiked the arrow a sliver up like she always liked it... she breathed… and then let the arrow fly. The arrow erupted into an enormous ice bolt that would look more fitting shooting out of a ballista, and smashed into Cho’Gath, freezing him solid.

Even with only one arm, Jax managed to leap into the air, while pouring magical energy into his lamppost. The light fixture shone bright, and then dark as Jax plunged it’s brass deep into Cho’Gath’s skull. The monster moaned, and then collapsed to a side. White smoke and flame erupted from its body, signifying its death.

“Are you alright!” Ashe rushed forwards to look at Jax’s wound. “Oh god, I’m so sorry--”
“Forget it. I shouldn’t have spent so much time shopping. Just good thing the other guy wasn’t here--”

Jax then realized.
Talon wasn’t here.


The assassin was crouched in the rushes, near the center lane. Ahri was busy killing minions about the battleground as she took advantage of Morgana’s absence. She was living in fantasyland. She was in for a rude awakening.

Talon leaped.


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mememan

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06-19-2012

"The assassin was crouched in the rushes..."
Isn't suposed to be Brushes?

Exelent as aways

Seens like purple team will make their first kill...


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Astraltar

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06-19-2012

Excellent...
More please