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[YOUSO1337 FANFICTION] The Dragon of Desolation (Leona-centric + OC)

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Youso1337

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04-09-2012

People leave votes, but no comments?

...just isn't the same... =/


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Sarkan of Arkham

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04-11-2012

Meh, works that way sometimes. tbh I completely forgot about this for a while, looking foward to the conclusion.


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gigantism

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04-17-2012

I love your fanfic. You do an excellent job with using really cerebral words that still fit the tone of the story. I like the universe you frame and your sentence variation too. And the characterizations for all the champions are unique and fitting.

I guess the only qualm I have is that Plagueis doesn't appear to be all that threatening if you think about it. Sure, we're TOLD he's the embodiment of evil, that champions 'feel a dread' facing him, and that he was a force in the past, but I still don't much see the ramifications of failure; the impact on Runeterra today if Leona fails here. It's kinda implied rather than shown, and I feel it should be emphasized more at some point.

Otherwise, I love your writing and kind of wish I could be as eloquent. Looking forward to the ending.


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Youso1337

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04-18-2012

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I love your fanfic. You do an excellent job with using really cerebral words that still fit the tone of the story. I like the universe you frame and your sentence variation too. And the characterizations for all the champions are unique and fitting.

I guess the only qualm I have is that Plagueis doesn't appear to be all that threatening if you think about it. Sure, we're TOLD he's the embodiment of evil, that champions 'feel a dread' facing him, and that he was a force in the past, but I still don't much see the ramifications of failure; the impact on Runeterra today if Leona fails here. It's kinda implied rather than shown, and I feel it should be emphasized more at some point.

Otherwise, I love your writing and kind of wish I could be as eloquent. Looking forward to the ending.
Good point on Plagueis being a "questionable threat". That'll be addressed in a future chapter.

To put it in perspective, though, at his full strength, Plagueis would be a comparable danger to Alduin (another Skyrim reference ).


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Sarkan of Arkham

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04-26-2012

Alduin level threat you say? Well granted I haven't played Skyrim so I'm a bit iffy on the details, but complete and utter annihilation of the world really just doesn't mesh with Plagueis's character, insofar as his massive superiority complex goes. Personally I was thinking along the lines of a Kefka/Lavos level apocalypse, wiping out most of everything to the point it woud never truly recover, but leaving enough of the world that he could have something to rule over like the god he sees himself as.


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Youso1337

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04-26-2012

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Alduin level threat you say? Well granted I haven't played Skyrim so I'm a bit iffy on the details, but complete and utter annihilation of the world really just doesn't mesh with Plagueis's character, insofar as his massive superiority complex goes. Personally I was thinking along the lines of a Kefka/Lavos level apocalypse, wiping out most of everything to the point it woud never truly recover, but leaving enough of the world that he could have something to rule over like the god he sees himself as.
That probably would've been a better analogy, IMO, though I have "Skyrim fever".

Although I can't really play Skyrim right now because my PC is on the fritz and I gotta get it repaired. I have a laptop, but it's not powerful enough for high-end gaming, so I'm gonna be off League (and Skyrim) for a while.


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gigantism

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05-24-2012

Any developments?


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Mirage Night

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05-25-2012

Ready for more. I like how your story is progressing.


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Yousonerfed

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06-15-2012

Blargh, writer's block is a b*tch. That and distractions from playing League and Skyrim don't help. =/

Would any of you mind if I made a preview of the next chapter to pass the time, or would that spoil you?


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gigantism

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06-21-2012

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Blargh, writer's block is a b*tch. That and distractions from playing League and Skyrim don't help. =/

Would any of you mind if I made a preview of the next chapter to pass the time, or would that spoil you?
Nah, just finish it when you finish it.