Well, words fail me, which I find ironic considering I am an author as well. Sometimes we read things that are so...right, somehow, that they fail to be easily quantifiable by words. Your story here is one of them.
What you have done is place a summoner into a relationship with a champion. In the simplest way, this is the second most common thing to do after pairing them with a second champion. But what you do with it is fairly uncommon. Your summoner doesn't start the story pining after the champion in question. He starts it being kicking is the head by the roughness of the mental link with other, less friendly, champions.
You don't force the relationship. It just happens. That's why it feels so natural. The way you describe the feeling of the summoning link, and the closeness the summoner eventually feels with Sona is really, really cathartic. You can feel every emotion that the summoner is feeling, and you can relate to it. Being a summoner is almost harder than being a champion in some regards, and your summoner doesn't man up and fight through it. He suffers, and Sona helps him through that suffering.
In a way, they're the same.
Both cannot talk about how they feel, and the only one who seems to really hear them, is the other. In any case, I am so very glad that I clicked on this story on a whim and read it. You've really made something wonderful here, and it is a d@mn shame you don't have more upvotes and comments on it. Thank you for the great read.
I want to get this off my chest.
I feel like I've taken a misstep here like any person would trying a craft for the first time. While I do think that there were flaws in thematic choices and the genuine humanity of the characters during the first couple chapters, I can't change the past. They fell in love no matter how hard I tried to stop it. That's right, the last thing I wanted to write was romance. There is a dangerous pride in writing romance. It's like trying to talk to god.
So what I started with "A Place Between War and Murder" is another try at focusing on human truths. To reveal the grander struggle of finding true friends, a theme I failed to portay that well in "Humble Interactions".
Again, thank you to who read my works, another thanks to those who comment, and eternal gratitude to those who criticize my writing.
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