Honestly, in the course of a month you've pumped out quite a bit here. I'd find it hard to critique you for a bit of slow writing, even if some of us might be antsy for the next installment. As far as I go (and I'm sure there are others in the same position) if I can get a couple good sentences down at the end of the day, and I don't have to rewrite them the following day, that's progress enough.
Chapter 2 - “Negotiations” [Part 4]
All manner of recording and picture taking runes and devices were set up along the walls of the Chamber of Equity. Banners of both Demacia and Noxus adorned their respective corners, and dozens of summoners and citizens alike watched from within the hall itself, or on various arcane receptors across the city-states. This was the single largest meeting between powers since the Kalamanda Incident and the talks that took place during that ordeal. On one side sat the Demacian Delegation that consisted of Jarvan Lightshield the Fourth, Garen Crownguard, and various aides, including a small group of Dauntless Vanguards to act as additional security in the case that something went amiss. Across the chamber sat the Noxian Delegation. General Jericho Swain stood, his raven atop his shoulder, dressed in his finest robes for the occasion. At his side stood Katarina Du Couteau, with Talon shadowing her. The air was buzzing with chatter from the crowd of summoners as the two sides sized up their opposition. The chatter, however, stopped abruptly as the doors at the front of the massive hall parted and shining golden armor carried by white wings floated through the vaulted doorway.
“All rise.” Kayle’s voice seemed to boom through the room, loud and clear, all the way to the back of the hall. With a mass of rustling, all in attendance stood. As they stood, all three High Councilors entered the hall and moved to take a seat: Kiersta Mandrake, Heywan Relivash, and Vessaria Kolminye. High Councilor Kolminye sat in the middle of the three as Kayle took up a position a level below. As the High Councilors stood, Kolminye addressed the hall.
“You may be seated.” All those in attendance took a seat as she continued. “Today, the High Council of Equity shall rule on the contested mining rites disputed by the City-State of Demacia, and the City-State of Noxus.” She motioned to each delegation as she spoke, before turning to address the crowd once more. “Judicator Kayle will conduct today’s proceedings. Each delegation shall present their evidence and claims regarding the ownership of the deposit. Objections are allowed at The Judicator’s discretion. At the end of today’s proceedings the Council will order a recess, and will return thereafter with their final verdict. If there are no further questions…” The High Councilor’s eyes scanned the room for a moment, looking for any raised hands or standing members of the delegations. Finding none, she, and the other two members, took a seat. “Very well then, let us begin.”
Well, Chapter 2 is finished. You might notice it was a little shorter than Chapter 1. Regardless, I felt no need to stretch it out any longer. It felt like a good place to end it. After all, any "negotiations" that took place were more or less over.
Anyway, feel free to comment on what you liked, what you think could be better, and talk about any theories you might have. I love discussion, because it really fuels the creative process. This is as much for you guys as it is for me to flex my creative muscles, so hearing what you have to say is very much welcome.
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