Guiding Light - A RivenXLux Fanfic

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Xsouldier

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02-15-2013

I started tearing up for some reason at the beginning, but it was beautiful I love how you just slowly went into it (instead of how a lot of the other smut writers do it). I absolutely loved it and I can not wait for more I must say, I am extremely happy I found this thread that one fateful afternoon.


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VanMan

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02-15-2013

loved chapter 15, keep it up


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Mr Ratz

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02-18-2013

Ceru...

You have done it again. Honestly, I was completely against your last scene from the beginning and you knew it. Yet, you managed to charm me with it. Very well written, in a classy manner. Thank you for the latest chapter, it was great. Truly, truly outrageous.

Keep up the good work. I can't wait to find out what comes next! :3


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Cerubois

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02-18-2013

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Ceru...

You have done it again. Honestly, I was completely against your last scene from the beginning and you knew it. Yet, you managed to charm me with it. Very well written, in a classy manner. Thank you for the latest chapter, it was great. Truly, truly outrageous.

Keep up the good work. I can't wait to find out what comes next! :3
I'm glad you liked it.

Told you not to worry too much. :P


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Mr Ratz

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02-19-2013

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I'm glad you liked it.

Told you not to worry too much. :P
You can't blame be for being worried. It was so well written that it took considerable effort to focus and not let my mind wonder. I can only imagine how hard it was to imagine and write all that. No puns intended I promise (maybe ).


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Cerubois

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02-19-2013

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You can't blame be for being worried. It was so well written that it took considerable effort to focus and not let my mind wonder. I can only imagine how hard it was to imagine and write all that. No puns intended I promise (maybe ).
That would be the reason it took about 30 hours to write 3500 words. :P


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Ravenbones

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02-21-2013

Meh... reminds me too much of a trashy beach novel soft core porn style. Had potential, but just not my cup of tea.


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Cerubois

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02-21-2013

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Meh... reminds me too much of a trashy beach novel soft core porn style. Had potential, but just not my cup of tea.
Potential to do what, exactly? I'd like to know more of your opinion. What do you think could be better?


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Ravenbones

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02-21-2013

I guess I should consider the target audience... Anywho the parts where you expanded beyond Lux gushing and Riven being unsure could be built up. I liked the parts involving the tournement and interactions with Lee Sin. Your take on the INstitue of War reminded me more of a college dorm which could be funny in it's own right. The rest seems like teen angst and a slow build up to the inevitable. It is more a matter of when and when instead of if.


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Cerubois

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02-21-2013

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I guess I should consider the target audience... Anywho the parts where you expanded beyond Lux gushing and Riven being unsure could be built up. I liked the parts involving the tournement and interactions with Lee Sin. Your take on the INstitue of War reminded me more of a college dorm which could be funny in it's own right. The rest seems like teen angst and a slow build up to the inevitable. It is more a matter of when and when instead of if.
Hmm... You're making this hard to decipher. Let me know if I'm interpreting it correctly.

You think I should put more description in the character development? I know the earlier chapters are rather lackluster for this, but I felt I'd been doing an okay job in this area recently. Was there a noticeable improvement, or am I just disillusioned?

The Institute... Yes, I did make it somewhat of a shared-residence kind of experience. This is a common viewpoint in a lot of stories. I'm fairly certain it's canon that champions are given their own rooms in the League that they are free to use. It's only fitting that they are afforded the standard necessities, provided they follow the rules of the League. That aside, I also envisioned the summoners being taught there, being the place where all summoners gather. It even fits the game experience quite nicely.

When it comes to the romance... Well, despite the big letters in the title that give away that particular ending, I wanted it to be slow and evolving. Since Riven has had very little experience in love, it would only be natural for her to go through what teens would. Even though she's older and more mature, she hasn't had to deal with emotion. She would struggle, she would stumble, she would go through that all-too-familiar angst.
The question in my mind wasn't whether it was inevitable or not (it was), but what would make sense? What fit the lore, the characters, and the story all at the same time? To me, it wasn't so much about when or if, but why. I think that was my goal for this style that developed.

Well, I'm glad you found something you liked in it, despite not finding it suited to your tastes. I know very well I can't appeal to everyone, and I won't try to. But I'll gladly take your considerations to make it better for the people that do get something out of it.