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Moby the White 12-04-2012 06:56 AM

Moby the White's stuff and other stuff
 
Hey I am Moby the White CCFC Member and this is my personal thread for organizing all of the work that I have done. If you happen to read my stuff and you like what you read please do not hesitate to give it a thumbs up :D


Regarding Review Requests

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My Champions:

Dirth-Master of Elements created on 6-12-2012

Gewitter-Fury of the Storms created on 6-17-2012

Red-Big game Huntress created roughly 11-27-12

Duncan-Bandalore Master created roughly 11-27-12

Bianca-The Forsworn created on 12-1-12

Vudu-The Witch Doctor created on 12-2-12

Zelos-The Frozen Lance created on 12-5-12

Krane-The Starcrossed Warrrior created on 12-8-12

Twist-The Breakdance Kid created on 12-12-12

Popo and Nana-The Ice Climbers created on 12-15-12

Walter-The Huntsman created on 12-19-12

Kil'gore-The Corrupted Broodfather created on 2-8-2013
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Scrapped Projects:

Quigley-The Earth Mover created on 11-27-12

Rob Blackblade created roughly around 11/30/12
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Work I have assisted with:

Alice the Dominator by Unexisted lore creation

Iris, Queen of the Bees by Z is for Zephyr and Kayfish lore creation

Quinn-The Elastic Wasteband by Sinspurch lore rework

Dante the Darkslayer by Cryoshell17 lore creation

Damiya - The Living Scrap Golem by AForgotten Angel lore spelling and grammar check minor changes made due to not knowing creator intent.

Safred, the All Knowing by LordAustin24 lore creation

Helba The Master of Chaos by Cryoshell17 lore creation

Longis Master of the Whip by 4irhead lore creation

Aitis by moltres27 major lore revision/rewrite

Domovoi by Darkzero1 and Cryoshell17 lore creation

Vash by Cryoshell17 lore creation

Smoke by Iam Versatility lore recreation

Assistance varies from basic spelling and grammar up to lore creation

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Work you should check out that I had nothing to do with, but I think is really good in some way:

Emily the Vengeful Possesion- Concept Art

Sebastion The Little Hero-Lorecraft

Cross The Six Winged Scythe- Most improved concept since its remake


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Hours of operation:
RETIRED
Contact Info:
Email: mobythewhite@gmail.com

Moby the White 12-04-2012 07:28 PM

About review requests:
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My hand is no longer suffering from temporary carpal tunnel so I will only be doing amap

Please feel free to post here for lore requests, review requests, or anything related to champion making and utilizing my help whatsoever. However, I must inform you that if you request for a review that you have at least reviewed another champion (does not have to be mine but that might earn you bonus points :P). Also if I help you by writing any lore I only request some form of acknowledgement if you actually use it as per a courtesy to the Author. You are welcome to change what I have written for you at any time, I am merely asking to be credited for assisting with lore. In addition, I do not write lore for champions that are entering into contests as per I am sometimes a judge. If I discover you have entered my lore into a contest without my consent as a judge you will be penalized in some fashion for that contest. You are welcome to follow my guides, tips, and criteria in order to develop a better lore, but using my lore in a contest that I am judging is unfair to me and yourself.

Please note that Champion review requests has its own thread CCFC Review Thread, Mark 3! and that this is not meant to be that thread. This is meant to get strictly my assistance on champions and my reviews and is only specific to me. Thank you, Moby.
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Disclaimer: I kindly ask that if you wish for me to review a champion of yours that you kindly return the favor. However, I do not require you to review my champions in order to recieve a review, I feel that doing so would breach the integrity of being a CCFC Member. So remember this is not a review trade you are not obligated to review anything of mine; however, doing so is always acceptable. Please also note that I cannot review any champion that I have assisted with in any shape way or form as per it would be unfair; however, I am more than willing to comment on it and give my opinions.
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To Do/Review List:
Write iam Versitility's lores

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FAQ:

Q. Can you tell us a little bit about who you are?

A. Yes. My igns are Moby the White and Moby White. My name is Moby-well that is what everyone calls me in real life, and no it is not my real name. In real life I am a published a published poet three times over; in addition, I have written 3 novels and currently have 3 more on the backburner still works in progress. My hobbies other than writing? Well I like singing, I love music, and I love video games. Its kind of funny but I am pretty good at playing both types of keyboards piano and computer :P. When I am in the real world, I work as a counselor for Juvenile Deliquents. So I put up with a lot of smartmouths sometimes xD. But I take it in stride and take out my frustrations on LoL/WoW. I have a Bachelor's Degree in Psychology and a Bachelor's Degree in Criminal Justice, I am currently employed as a Case Manager for MH/MR clientele.

Anyways, recently I returned to CCF after a 6-7 month hiatus, (my last project before I left was Gewitter) and one day I had the urge to start making some more concepts. I had always loved doing it before so I thought I would give it another go. Upon returning I spent the first couple weeks creating 5 new champions-3 of which were in one day. I decided to start helping other people with their lores, either by writing it for them, doing reworks, or just basic revisions. Soon I later discovered the existence of CCFC and decided I could put my helpfulness to good use. So I applied to be a member and was accepted after showing them all of the reviews and works I had done. As a council member I decided to make it part of my responsibility-since I am active quite frequently everyday-to review other peoples' works and assist as needed. In order to do so I invented Lore PQWER to help me with reviews. As your newest CCFC member my goal is to help you the readers in any shape way or form that I can. I am a person that strives to represent the peoples' interests. And I will always try to have your best interests in mind within council and within this forum. I will make you the promise to always handle things in the most professional manner that I can and if I can't well I guess I'll go play league and come back when I am cooled off :P

Q. What merit does Lore PQWER have?
A: Well Lore PQWER itself is just simply based off of the Likert scale. My ratings of your performance in each criteria is on a scale of 1-5. These ratings are based on my opinion which is formulated through researching similar abilities and effects. If you have something completely original I analyze how it could possibly break the game. Although it isn't a perfect system most ratings are above average and generally accurately display what errors have been made.

Q. Why did you develop Lore PQWER?
A: Well, originally when I began to review champions I didn't know what to say to the author. I didn't know how to critique them without causing them direct insult. I felt that when I started reviewing champions at first, that each time I did so seemed different. I didn't like that, there was no standardization in my reviews. I could say one champ was good based on certain reasons, and a similar champion I would review differently. So I developed a system that put out consistent results so that every review could be comparative. This way authors can look at another review I have done, and see how they can be improve their work.

Q. Why does your review mean anything?
A: Well as a CCFC Member I am not here to request for review trades, so firstly my reviews are not selfish. If you wish to review me as an outcome of my review it is appreciated, but I do not require any "payment" for my reviews. Secondly everyone makes mistakes even me, in fact I have made countless mistakes on some of my concepts only to have someone catch it for me. We don't always see every mistake we make ourselves, some times it requires a fresh set of eyes to analyze the faults of our creations.

Q. I don't agree with your rating what should I do?
A: My rating is solely my opinion when it comes down to it. If you do not agree with something I said, then you should tell me, but be prepared to explain the subject we disagree on.

Q. I don't understand what your rating meant, or it wasn't very descriptive, can you elaborate?
A: Of course, if you have any questions regarding my reviewal feel free to post within this thread.

Q. Moby, I wish to contact you for further assistance, how can I do that?
A. I am in this forum nearly everyday, if you post in this thread wanting to contact me I will be sure to find it. I spend quite some time just spam clicking auto-refresh waiting for replies to some of my threads so you are guaranteed to receive a fast response.



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My system I developed for Review:

Lore PQWER:
Lore PQWER- pronounced Lore Power is a rating scale of 150 points in which the concept being reviewed earns 25 points for Lore and 25 points per ability. Lore Power can no longer exceed the maximum score of 150.
The rating system is based off five key criteria aspects, each criteria is worth 5 points and is rated in the following manner:
0:Incomplete, 1: Poor, 2: Below Average, 3: Average, 4: Above Average, 5: Excellent. The criteria is as follows:

Lore is based on 5 pts:
1. Clarity-Syntax does your lore have proper spelling and grammar? Fluidity-does your lore flow well in story going from point to point and makes sense?
2. Theme- does your lore have a strong thematic approach?
3. League motivation- does your lore explain how they got their powers and why they joined the league?
4. Tone and Mood- How does it read and does it inspire emotional response? Does the reader like reading it?
5. Originality- Is you lore original or unique? Does it put an innovative twist on something well known?

Passives are based on 5 pts:
1. Utility- Does it have some sort of mechanic? Is it specific to your champions role?
2. Synergy- is it a mechanic that will work with your abilities? If it is a standalone ability how much does it benefit your champion or your team?
3. Theme -does it create a consistent theme with your lore?
4. Clarity-does it have proper syntax (spelling and grammar), does it make sense or is information missing or even confusing?
5. Balance- does it have balanced numbers? Is there counterplay to this ability?

Abilities are based on 5 pts:
1. Utility- Does it have some sort of mechanic? Is it specific to your champions role?
2. Synergy- does it work well with your passive? If it is a standalone ability how much does it benefit your champion or your team?
3. Theme- does it fit the overall theme of your champion's lore?
4. Clarity- does it have proper spelling and grammar, does it make sense or is information missing or even confusing?
5. Balance- does it have balanced numbers? Is there counterplay to this ability?


Bonus Points- Up to 5 bonus pts can be gained from lore and abilities and concept overall:
1. Originality/Unique Theme- is it a new unique idea?
2. Neat Animations- do the abilities have a cool new animation that makes the attack look and sound really cool?
3. Visual fluff- does your concept have visual concepts like skins, icons, and do they fit the description and the theme?
4. Gameplay- is your champion exciting, does it make readers want to play it?
5. Organization- is everything present and organized neatly through quote usage, bold-ing, underlining, or even creating separations?

What is your Lore PQWER?!

Zarkof 12-04-2012 07:45 PM

Rennal Spiritmight, the Bookworm overall review

Man, that stuffy doll. I'm sorry but it's just confusing the heck outta me still. mostly because of me being derp.

Mytharionas 12-04-2012 08:14 PM

If you have the time, i'd like to get a review for one of my champions, i've got a few but i'm going to link to my first one...

Albaton, Fist of the Loving Family - http://na.leagueoflegends.com/board/....php?t=2358098

I assume you would want me to review a champion of yours in exchange. Do you have a preference as to whom you'd want a review for?

Moby the White 12-04-2012 08:16 PM

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Originally Posted by Zarkof (Hozzászólás 32099740)
Rennal Spiritmight, the Bookworm overall review

Man, that stuffy doll. I'm sorry but it's just confusing the heck outta me still. mostly because of me being derp.

well with your help I think i've got it almost perfected

Moby the White 12-04-2012 08:19 PM

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Originally Posted by Mytharionas (Hozzászólás 32100808)
If you have the time, i'd like to get a review for one of my champions, i've got a few but i'm going to link to my first one...

Albaton, Fist of the Loving Family - http://na.leagueoflegends.com/board/....php?t=2358098

I assume you would want me to review a champion of yours in exchange. Do you have a preference as to whom you'd want a review for?

I do not request reviews as per i'm part of CCFC in order for a review to work on this thread you review someone including possibly me and then request my review. However if you wish to review someone I made, I suggest you take your choose of any of my champs they are all pretty well made but the best looking ones organizationally are Vudu and Bianca.

Moby the White 12-04-2012 08:39 PM

however i reviewed your lore regardless because i am nice :D

Zarkof 12-04-2012 08:41 PM

btw I have done at least 6 or 7 champ reviews so I guess I deserve one from you then?

Moby the White 12-04-2012 08:46 PM

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Originally Posted by Zarkof (Hozzászólás 32101779)
btw I have done at least 6 or 7 champ reviews so I guess I deserve one from you then?

you deserve a lot thanks to all your help with stuffy doll did you see the new ult btw?
link champion and ill give you a review :D

Zarkof 12-04-2012 08:49 PM

it's back up in my first post


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